It was Milly’s first day
at school at Merriweather Academy. The Academy was a fairly average
school; with average grades, average teachers, average students. It was
apparent from the start the Milly would be an outcast.
When she was just five she discovered she had these supernatural powers – she could
control the element of Fire. It was like she was the chosen one, and she had to
use her powers for the greater good. Milly could heat things up, set them on
fire, burn things to the floor, dry out anything physically possible...she
could even juggle with fire (not that that helped society, it was just a trick
she learnt). Despite loving her powers, she still had a part in her mind that
hated them so much; she found it hard to make
friends because she dreaded getting close to anyone.
It was Lauren’s first day
of school at Merriweather Academy – and she was very excited. She strode
down the path and towards the entrance, floating along with the soft gusts of
wind that were pulling her in the direction of the school. She wasn’t going to
let her superpower to Air get the better of her; she wanted to make the most of
having a chance at living a normal life, with normal surroundings. For too long
she’d been cooped up in a mental institute, after
she had discovered her element, Air, and had tried to convince everyone
that it was true. Lauren laughed as she discreetly levitated and zoomed along
to the entrance. She’s lucky she managed to persuade everyone that she was
normal and it was just a phase she had went through, so she didn’t want to get
caught and be sent to the operation table as part of an experiment.
It was Kate’s first day of school at Merriweather Acadamy. The shy, withdrawn girl hurried up the stairs, clutching
her books in her left arm and her lunch and bag in her right arm. She went
around the corner and into the girl’s bathroom, and dropped her bags next to
the sink. Looking up and into the mirror, she stared intently into her
reflection. She pulled around with her cheeks, her jaw, her eyes and mouth. Why
did she look so normal but inside could be so far from it? Kate’s head dropped
to the sink, blinked, and the tap began to run. She blinked again and the water
froze in time, but you could still hear it running like a jammed television program
where the picture stops but the noise still continues. Being in control of the
element of Water was her escape, she could play around with it on her own and
it would keep her occupied – she could forget about
her glossophobia (fear of speaking in public or to anyone in general).
It was Sam’s first day at
school at Merriweather Academy. As he wandered down the long, dull
corridor, he contemplated running straight back through those gates again. Sam felt isolated, trapped amongst normality. What
kind of superhuman would want to involve themselves in normal people? Sam’s stared
outside of the window and over towards the huge pile of boulders that were
supposed to be some kind of ‘sculpture’. His eyes turned green and each one
split and crumbled in front of his eyes. He began to feel the ground rumbling
underneath him, and the lockers shook violently either side of him. Sam turned
his head towards the sound of frightened and confused screams coming from
behind the canteen door. Having the power of Earth, one of the key elements,
was dominating Sam’s life. He can never feel a
strong emotion without causing some sort of natural disaster.
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Four new kids starting
a new school think they’ll be outcasts and isolated
because of their most deadly secret – their superhuman powers where they
control the earth’s most important elements, Fire, Earth, Water and Air. But
what they don’t know is that they’ll find each
other for a reason, and it’s not just a coincidence, it’s to save
the world. #tweetpitch
I like the idea of the story and the way it is laid out :)
ReplyDeleteI think that you could do with adding some more detail to what'll happen to these 4 characters and what big problems they will come across :)
ReplyDeleteI think this story idea is really effective but i agree that i think you should develop the characters more. But at this stage it is effective :)
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